Published February 25, 2010
There are some realities in life which we all must bow to.Though we can try to fool ourselves and be convinced that certain targets can be achieved, certain barriers can be overcome, the truth ultimately knocks us out like a boomerang when it comes back in the form of failure.
So when you shove your face into your palms and cry your eyes out,I'll be passing by you,giving that winners smirk,telling you...I warned you.
You see...I was always right.When you were daydreaming of being the next big novelist I was quietly telling you to listen to your peers and take up tax law.Of course those words fell on deaf ears and you went ahead with what you thought was right.15 years later...you now live in a 1 room rented apartment;not one bedroom house,but one room house,state benefit is making you barely survive...something that you could have avoided.And while you smash your head in frustration and agony on your writing desk, I whisper something more painful to you "Follow what you like and success will follow.Is that not what you told me?".
With a tearful, rage filled face you lift the reading lamp and hurl it at me.But I'm not real.I'm just the warning words of a concerned friend whose wisdom HAS made sense...only a little too late.Suddenly a fear grips you from within...you hate to write now.All that you once dreamed of,all that you thought was your life,...now all of a sudden...."WHY!"
Or is this just the night before dawn?
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You have many punctuation issues. For example, there must be one space after every period or comma. You should have already known this from reading books.
Like in that sentence you don't need the extra period.Also, after everything with quotation marks (like dialogue) you don't put in a period. Never put periods outside of quotation marks ( "" )
I don't even know what your writing about. It doesn't make any sense. It seems like you are telling the reader to not follow their dreams... what a strange thing to write about. It's just rambling. And the incorrect punctuation and excessive ellipses ( ... ) make it seem even more so. You obviously attempted to be deep, but it didn't work out for you.
You have done a very nice job, I can feel the emotions brimming inside this short piece. How dreamers will one day face their reality...very interestingly dark and demotivational topic, but the end sentence and the title helps the readers realized that they have their choice in the beginning. Either try and fail, or do not dream at all. But the ending sentence make the readers(maybe the optimistic ones like me) rethink, and hope that maybe all of those will only be a hardship, a trial that one will have to go through to finally achieve their goals.
Good thing that I have many plans for my future...I knew that a writer job is never easy, and you reminded me of that.
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